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The dialogue that moves us

Let’s deepen this dialogue, shall we?

By and large when people suggest I ‘expand upon a scene’ they are asking for more dialogue (as opposed to more action or suspense). It seems to be trademark for me to have key points in the story in my head that I am dying to get to, sometimes at the expense of all that talking and character development.

So this long weekend (YAY MAY 2-4!) I am going to go back into some old scenes in Casebooks 1 thru 3 and expand on the dialogue, hopefully in a positive way.

Needing inspiration of course, I will start my morning with reading some scenes known for their moving dialogue; I’m thinking about:

  1. the back-and-forth between Ophelia and Hamlet in Act 3, Scene 1, when their fathers are hiding behind a tapestry listening in.

  2. the scene in Pride and Prejudice when Lady Catherine de Bourge confronts Lizzie at her parents’ home is some great dialogue.

  3. there is a scene in Firefly: Serenity with the Operative, Captain Mal and Inara in the Temple that I’ve always found super-clever but I couldn’t find a link to post to. If you get a chance, watch it, as I will today.

  4. The scene with Watson and Holmes in the new BBC series in the back of the cab when Holmes gets offended when Watson sniffs and says “The Police don’t consult amateurs” is a brilliantly written little piece of dialogue that I’ve watched over and over again.

  5. I could post any scene from the first three years of the West Wing and you’d get a great example of dialogue to aspire to, but I picked one of the first that really made me laugh (from Season 1, Episode 3):

Josh Lyman: You know what, C.J.? I really think I’m the best judge of what I mean, you paranoid Berkeley shiksa feminista… Wow, that was way too far. C.J. Cregg: No, no. Well, I’ve got a staff meeting to go to and so do you, you elitist, Harvard, fascist, missed-the-dean’s-list-two-semesters-in-a-row Yankee jackass. Josh Lyman: Feel better getting that off your chest there, C.J.? C.J. Cregg: I’m a whole new woman.

And then there is all the internet has to offer us:

  1. Here is Nathan Bransford’s seven keys to writing good dialogue

  2. Then there is Gloria Kempton’s take on writing dialogue over at Writing Slices

  3. I also really liked Kevin Craig’s thoughts on it (he suggests I think too much about it, and I agree)

Do you guys have any other suggestions? I’m getting some great bubbling ideas from all this already, but I could always use more inspiration!

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